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Haikuwrimo March 08

March 1

puddling dirt,
snow shivers slightly, fearing
the coming warm

March 2

sniffles turn,
like pages in a book,
to warm sighs

March 3

West, exclaims the sun,
to a sunset, where sweaters
stay closeted


March 4

intimate whites
congregate within grassy,
sun-filled wedding days

March 5

smelted silver
puffs rain down; refreshing
the season, rebirth

March 6

sleepy eyes open
a bright world; hibernation
hunger takes over

March 7

layers peel off
one cloth at a time, baring
skin for sunburns

March 8

Arizona summer -
more skin to placed
on public showcase

March 9

slowly inching
away into darkness,
shade is luxury

March 10

greens sprout,
cracking a connect-the-dots
across earthen pores

March 11

reaching for the sun,
branches hunch as twilight looms

March 12

exquisite foods
mean nothing to a pregnant
lady's stomach

March 13

sillhouettes stand
higher, above scurrying ants,
tiredly going to work

March 14

petals open, embracing
the sun in all its majesty
only to burn and wilt

March 15

tiny tingles crawl
up and down and all around;
break out the sunscreen

March 16

a soft breeze
gently washes filthy heat
away for another day

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*UPDATE*
I apologize for not updating this for almost all month. I got married, did some house sitting, and now am expecting a baby.


Alright, this is another haikuwrimo.

I love haikus.

This haikuwrimo is being put on by *Iscariot-Priest
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beautiful dear.

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Death is the only way to achieve perfection.
a fine start, and your love of haiku is quite apparent ...

i'm glad you agreed to join us and i look forward to more from you this month :)

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Life is what happens to you while you're busy making other plans.
Nice.... Very nice.... I love the snow being threatened! Go sun!

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:spotlight-left:My Faith in Humanity Project 2008:spotlight-right:
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I like how you've personified all the haiku's subjects, be it snow, sniffles or sun. Weird that they all start with "S", but nice nonetheless.

An interesting choice to use a simile in a haiku (which will no doubt make the fundamentalist froth at the mouth), but I think it's all good.

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“Now me lay down to sleep.
Mow da zeebas down like sheep.
Give dem to me nice and dead.
Me no happy ‘til me fed.”
-Bedtime prayer of crocs, Pearls Before Swine
My Faith in Humanity:361
It's what I love to do. I love to play with poetic elements and push them into small poems. Also, the "S" thing was unintentional, but perhaps I will go with it.

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Of all the things I've lost, I miss my mind the most.

==Mark Twain
I like how you have italicized the suns words....

Similes work in haiku, I feel. To heck with the fundamentals. :D

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:spotlight-left:My Faith in Humanity Project 2008:spotlight-right:
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They sure do. Life is too short to have everything completely structured and finite.

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Of all the things I've lost, I miss my mind the most.

==Mark Twain
I love the idea of
refreshing
the season. It is exactly that.

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Look who gained +20 cool points!
This is really neat. Nicely done!

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"Speaking the truth in times of universal deceit is a revolutionary act." - George Orwell

"Facts do not cease to exist because they are ignored." - Aldous Huxley

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